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Philosophical poem


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nostie

Fri Dec 08 2006, 12:11AM

Registered Member #185 Joined: Thu Mar 30 2006, 10:42PM
Posts: 3167

Written by Nostie

Oh, how you and I
So insignificant (at most)
Do suffer and toil
Through the burdens of life
When death, easy and effective,
Will bring the same effect
Upon the universe

feedback is cool. note that i wrote this in 30 seconds without revision.

Amped

Fri Dec 08 2006, 01:53AM

Registered Member #301 Joined: Thu Jun 15 2006, 01:55AM
Posts: 888

Diction is probably the most important part of poetry. Make sure all of your words are chosen carefully, and for a reason. That can make a poem 100x better. As it stands now, your meaning is an interesting thought and well conveyed, just improve on your language usage.

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nostie

Fri Dec 08 2006, 01:58AM

Registered Member #185 Joined: Thu Mar 30 2006, 10:42PM
Posts: 3167

I've just realized that i used effective in one line, then on the next i used effect... I felt like i should change it at first, but I think I'm going to keep this poem exactly as i wrote it the first time... I think it means more unrevised.